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February 24, 2012
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Unicorn naps seem magic;
coo of foals snore.
each hair reflects sunshine,
each head dozing grace.

Even now, wild delphiniums
sway; yearlings sleep peaceful.

Lady youth has seldom met
temptation, now woes struggle,
each horse enchants,
she exalts.
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from =futilitarian's forum challenge [link]

This was ridiculously hard!
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Mood: Joy *akarra Apr 10, 2012  Student Writer
It has a wonderful sound and movement. You use parallel structures well! Thanks for sharing.
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^Beccalicious Sep 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you :D
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Beautiful imagery. Brutal challenge!
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^Beccalicious Sep 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Brutal yes, have you tried it yourself? If you do, don't start with unicorns :p
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:iconmagpie-poet:
No, but I've tried on and off for years to do a dna poem where the lines have to start and end with the matching dna tags so either CG/GC or AT/TA and form a helix.
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~chadwood Mar 30, 2012   Writer
You've done a fine job at meeting that challenge! Great feel to this one.
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^Beccalicious Sep 22, 2012  Professional Writer
It was an evil challenge!
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~chadwood Sep 24, 2012   Writer
I know. It was brutal.
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`OfOneSoul Mar 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
After reading the forum challenge, I can definitely appreciate what you've done here. I myself am tempted to try my hand at it and accept the challenge. :plotting:

In the end this simple bit of poetry possesses so much imagery for me. I see a gorgeous portrait throughout changing with nature and magic. You have a lovely way with words - I especially adore the use of "yearlings" and "delphiniums". :faint:

The last stanza is simply enchanting.

"Lady youth has seldom met
temptation, now woes struggle,
each horse enchants,
she exalts."

"she exalts" in itself leaves me pondering. I love poetry with the power to inspire. This is fantastic poetry. Wonderful work. :clap:

:heart: *OfOneSoul
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^Beccalicious Sep 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you very much :D

(yes I know you commented months ago, I am finally getting around to appreciating :heart:)
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