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Cup of Tea Promise by `Beccalicious:iconBeccalicious:

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It all starts
with cup of tea promises,
watered down lies,
and coffee depression.

When we've taken our breath;
inhaled the aroma of the mug
and accepted what we find,
we drink--
to our own distaste
our own dissatisfaction.

Yet between bitter sips
warmed chest;
clutched hands,
we sit in comfort of the liquid--
as if the elixir of life itself
Snuck into the drink.

Despite broken cups,
with cracks and chips
we hold to the tea dependently;
take comfort
and smile.
©2007-2008 `Beccalicious
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Submitted: October 12, 2007
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Written about 2 weeks ago about feeling unemployed and the idea how people will always offer you a cup of tea when you're feeling down as if it is going to content you.

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~Fushball:iconFushball: Oct 12, 2007, 2:28:06 AM
but it does make you feel a little bit better :)

liked the use of the colour matephors - "And coffee depression" especially

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*Iscariot-Priest:iconIscariot-Priest: Oct 12, 2007, 11:05:08 AM
At first I felt an incredible sense of deja vu, the I remembered why.

Check out this poem: [link]

Great minds do think a like, I guess. :D

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Mow da zeebas down like sheep.
Give dem to me nice and dead.
Me no happy ‘til me fed.”

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`Beccalicious:iconBeccalicious: Oct 12, 2007, 11:49:47 AM
It has similar themes, that doesn't surprise me because tea is a common thing people are given in need of comfort. But I don't think it's deja vu- I've never seen that poem before.

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~Wolf-with-a-pen:iconWolf-with-a-pen: Oct 12, 2007, 1:21:18 PM
Wonderful job!

I think you've done a wonderful job expressing how something as simple as a cup of tea can really offer a small comfort. No, it doesn't make everything better. But as you so eloquently expressed, it is something to find some comfort in.

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~Rosenberg4life:iconRosenberg4life: Oct 12, 2007, 2:12:22 PM Mood: Love
Love it! Keep it up!
(I am also from UK)
*Iscariot-Priest:iconIscariot-Priest: Oct 12, 2007, 5:37:10 PM
Nah, it's not an accusation, more of a humorous realization on my part.

I enjoyed both pieces very much.

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“Now me lay down to sleep.
Mow da zeebas down like sheep.
Give dem to me nice and dead.
Me no happy ‘til me fed.”

-Bedtime prayer of crocs, Pearls Before Swine
~gabstaa:icongabstaa: Oct 12, 2007, 5:49:45 PM
It really paints a picture. I enjoyed this poem alot.

We drink--
To our own distaste
Our own dissatisfaction.

My favourite lines. Really powerfull.

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Cheflin.
~doyel17:icondoyel17: Oct 12, 2007, 10:40:47 PM Mood: Love
its an amazing piece...
~salad7:iconsalad7: Oct 13, 2007, 12:21:52 AM
I love this. I love how you used comparisons to beverages and such so effectively. Awesome! I can't even critique it. Because I can't think of anything to critique. (it drives me nuts when I request advanced critique and don't get any). FAVE!

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~sammehsweet:iconsammehsweet: Oct 13, 2007, 1:29:23 AM
It's the little things that we couldn't do without, they'd shake us if we didn't have them.

What a nice sentiment, carefully observed, beautifully crafted and eloquently set out for the reader. The poem's sense of pace, progression and control through punctuation is matched only by its articulation of ideas.

Nicely done, I quite feel like a cup of tea =)

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