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How did you get poo on your ear? And
how is it when we think you’re dreaming your
curious eyes share the truth. And why
is it when we dine, you wail until we stop for you
to repay our comfort with projectile vomit on you, on me, on daddy, on the sofa, the floor, the cushions
and my dinner plate.

 

Your hands raise above your head;
this is the way to sleep and
this is the way you snore and
this is the way you will then wave your shark fin hand to tell me
it’s feeding time again. 

 

I love you because you remind me of a man
who farts and smiles just like you and wraps yourself in
my old cardigan as if it was me cuddling you. And you both
drive me crazy to frustration but make me smile with one look
of adoration.

So my prompt journal was full of "write poems about your child" and I didn't want to. However when I started I realised that I could write essay length poems based on what a child does, so this was originally much longer, but cut down to the bits I felt fit together. It's just an afternoons work, so I expect there is much to be done to improve this piece. :)
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SIRE-N Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Student General Artist
This is so charming. <3
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neurotype Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hmm, I kind of want it as prose with the occasional bits of poetry, like haiku accompanying paragraphs ("haibun"??) :P

Bahaha poo on the ear. Babies terrify me.
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HarbingerNovel Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
I like the whimsy of this piece :)
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Treyos Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
He likes to share! He just needs to learn that there are some things that shouldn't be shared. Like food you already ate. ;P
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MaxwellSmaart Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
Loving the last stanza! Sweet piece; really conveys a sense of family and love, and in not very many words. Fantastic! :)
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, motherhood. God bless you one and all!
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vespera Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH ha ha ha :D great opening!
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Beccalicious Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013   Writer
True quote from myself :p
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vespera Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I can't remember what movie it is, but the mother is like, "chocolate or poo?" and then tastes it, "chocolate!" and the other lady goes, "what if it had been poo??????" ha ha ha ha ha!
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Baby Mama. :heart: Tina Fey
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