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Leaving the train station
alone I watch strangers head home.

The waves for yellow cabs and
stench of fresh-lit cigarettes, I let
the cold cloud white breath.

Even at midnight, a long-coated businessman
hurries past with laptop bag bulging and blackberry to ear. Behind me,
a clip-clack of heels and giggles-
their night hasn’t ended.  

Across the road, three youths in hooded
tops kick a can whilst eating chips only stopping
as clip-clacks pass them and swoon
immaturity. Swear words exchange.

In the ice-wind rubbish travels as if taking
a commute, tapa-tapping the concrete. 

Exhausted I can only wait with
white breath etching blue hands desperate to be
warmed. Eyes fight; tired and
vigilant


Napo day 3- I find myself in this position often
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:iconrlkirkland:
rlkirkland Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, life.
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Beccalicious Apr 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Indeed :)
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:icongrimface242:
I LOVE people watching. It's absolutely my favorite pass time. Though I don't think I could make it sound as elegant as this. :la:
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Beccalicious Apr 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Haha, about as elegant as a hippo but thank you :D I am a ridiculous people watcher!
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:icongrimface242:
Pssh. It's elegant. Take the compliment! :threaten:

We should people watch together. In a park. With popcorn. And sunglasses. Can't forget the sunglasses.
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Bark Apr 4, 2013  Professional Writer
The only thing not great about this is the mention of white breath twice.
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Beccalicious Apr 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Interesting, I did the repeat deliberately. I am thinking the first mention is the weaker point?
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Bark Apr 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Meh, what do I know? I'm racking my brain right now for a possible alternative and I'm firing blanks. But yeah, if I were going to change it, it would be the first mention.
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