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Taking a cliché phrase and being literal :D
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:iconmagpie-poet:
:giggle: Brilliant idea. I feel like it would help if we could see/hear of him/her trying for contact, even eye contact when their eyes slide to the corner.
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:iconbatmanwithbunnyears:
Usually cliches register like one unit, so once you break one down into its constituent parts in a literal interpretation, I hear it as a meaningful phrase for the first time since childhood. Not only does it make that one phrase much more interesting, it gets my mind wandering about what else I can take literally...

Telling the story from the elephant's perspective instead of an onlookers was an interesting choice since it makes the elephant seem more alive and real, but I think if you made the elephant relatable, it would have added yet another dimension. You could have had the elephant peacocking and doing tricks for attention, only to be coldly ignored like a child in a neglectful family. Perhaps the elephant isn't angry about the lack of attention: just dejected, listless, and depressed, like nothing he does is ever good enough.
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:iconozcanuck:
Well a philosophy anyway ... calling it 'legitamate' is drawing a long bow IMHO :-)
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:iconozcanuck:
legitimate (my bad)
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:iconplaugh:
Very nice. The metaphor that won't be denied. Very cool. :)
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Itti Jul 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I like what you've done here! Nice choice and written pretty well too :D
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:iconozcanuck:
Cute on the electrons line .... very cool! I have been known to tell my family in Canada "Don't spare the electrons .. send me some damn photos!"
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Itti May 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:) Thanks.
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