Laughter flutters between, as you
entwine between branches; as if
they were maypole ribbons.
--lve this segment.

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I really like the maypole bit, and the image you get of the nymphs fluttering between branches

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Such a colorful piece

For beyond your woodland festivity lies the burdens of men---my favorite part. Great stuff

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Lovely! I really hate it when people ask for advanced critique and I can't spot any points for improvement; if you have to look really hard for flaws, I think it's self-defeating. But since you ask, I wonder if you could add a visual aspect to this - kind of make it look like nymphs dancing about (as much as one can with words). You get a real sense of that anyway, but maybe that could be enhanced by the layout.

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I love it! The ending line is perfect. Great imagery, and great work overall. :]

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Gorgeosus!
I feel you could do more with it though...
but very nicely written

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As always you write such amazing poetry. I like the nymph idea, though I admit to enjoying some of your other pieces more. Still, great work

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